Today, the start of a work week, is the day that I devote to hosting the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. In the challenge, I ask that you write a story using between 100-150 words and that you use the opening line and the photo prompt to create your story. The opening line of the challenge is not included in the word count. Here is my story with the opening line in bold and italics.
© 2015, Marcy B. Ayanian
As her mount shifted uneasily under her, she grasped the brim of her old felt Stetson, gazed upwards and remembered Jean Pierre,” and what a jerk he had been to her. She was not going to forget the lessons she learned while with him.
It was a delicious romance at first, and then at around the three-month mark he began to show his true colors. His biggest problem was alcohol. When cleaning up his house one day, when she asked him where the broom was he replied, “Where did you park it?”
In an alcoholic haze, he would have flashbacks of his ex. Instead of the ex’s face, the visions changed the face to hers. She remembered the morning when she awoke to find him on the couch. He told her that in the middle of the night she had kicked him out of bed telling him, “This is no place for little boys.”
The night that he almost struck her with a chair was the last straw. Jean-Pierre died that night.
* * * * * * * * * * * * *
I would like to thank my dear friend Marcybee for not only supplying the photo for this week’s challenge, but the opening line as well. If you would care to join in on this challenge, then click HERE!
Thank you dear reader for taking the time out of your busy day to drop on by for a quick read. Be well… ^..^
Great story, Barbara…I was not expecting that ending and love when I am surprised…he won`t be bothering anyone EVER again.
🙂
Good story, Barbara. I would guess it was self defense. What a mental case. She was lucky to survive. I hope she doesn’t make that mistake again. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
Why thanks Suzanne! It is hard to kill someone off with so few words.
At least he won’t bother her or anybody else now. Great story.
Thank you Sally!
I see she’s a woman who won’t take any nonsense and jumps straight to the ultimate solution. Great story!
Thank you Ali! I am glad yo enjoyed it!
Neatly crafted. Great tale.
Thank you YS!
Interesting take on the prompt. Another alcoholic with an ex, I can identify since my ex is an alcoholic. Very good job with a good end. BTW, mine is still alive. 🙂
Thanks Susan! I love your story too!
Dark but good! I like it!
Why thank you JA!
That happens, win their love and then show them who the real boss is, except this time it backfired! Well done!
Thank you Yolanda!
Getting the alcohol bottle stuck down his throat and cutting off his air was one of the more odd ways to commit suicide – so thought Inspector Clouseau.
It was an odd way, wasn’t it?
Did not expect that ending.
I hope that you enjoyed it!
I did enjoy it
🙂
And nobody missed him, right?
Not a soul!
Good! Sounds like he is better off dead than what she might do to him. LOL!! hahaha! Good for her – she “offed” him.
He required the ending he got.
Yes he did!