It is Monday and once again I am participating in the Mondays Finish the Story flash fiction challenge. The rules for this challenge are to write a story that goes with the photo and uses the opening line provided. The word limit is between 100-150 not including the opening line. Here is the photo and my story!
“When the team heard the dam explode, they knew they had limited time to make it to safety.β The team made their way into the rapids, hoping that with their paddling they would be able to get farther down river.
They could hear the roar of the water from the dam as it rushed towards them. “Strap in!” shouted Captain Venisant. “All paddles in!”
The team complied with orders. Each man grabbed a hold of the strapping. The roar of the water was loud. Taking a quick look back, the Captain shouted, “Brace for impact.”
The water crashed down on them. The men held on tight. The rocks at the rivers bottom battered them. The raft slowly began to rise. Finally, it surfaced.
Each man drew a deep breath. They made it without casualties. “Well done men!” shouted the Captain.
They all looked at each other. Smiles adorned every face. Then they heard the roar. Turning to look ahead, they hit the top of the falls.
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Thank you dear reader for stopping by today! Have a marvelous Monday and be well… ^..^
The feelings of success… not yet earned? Loved it!
π Thanks Roger!
Always a twist… what no aliens? Ah… that’s it they are saved by the aliens – Just hope the Captain remembered some ‘Captain in a bottle’ π
Nice really. I jumped ship myself and went in another direction π
Thanks Jules! I like that: Captain in a bottle. Will have to remember that… π Loved your story too!
An adventure trip gone bad…very bad. I liked the twist at the end. π
π Thanks!
Good story, Barb. This was a great picture to write an action story. Seems they’re having one problem after another. Well done. π — Suzanne
Thank you Suzanne! I enjoyed your story too!
I agree with PJ, it sounds like a nightmare.
Wonderfully written, and I could imagine myself there with them.
I did this right then Francesca! Thank you for the comment and I am happy that I made you feel the story! Be well…
Ooh … I like the way you’ve done this, Barbara. What a great twist at the end! π
Thank you Millie! When your message came up for moderation of your post today it had a 404 error. So I think maybe you were making a change. I waited for a bit before approving the track back until you got things sorted out. I hope that you do not mind! Be well my dear, and I look forward to what you come up with next week! You do have a way with words… ^..^
Sorry about the hold up, Babs. I can’t remember making any changes, but I make so many typos it’s quite possible I was! Thank you for the lovely compliment, too. Where would we all be without wonderful words? They mean everything to we bloggers! π
They do indeed! Loved your story Millie!
You have great descriptive power…and your prompts are amazing too…kudos
Thank you Shivangi! I am happy that you are enjoying the MFtS challenge!
Just as they start to think they’ve come through it in one piece! Great ending, Barbara. π
Thank you! It came to me in the blink of an eye to have the waterfall! π
Just when they thought they were safe… nice twist!
I love twisting a tale…don’t you? Thank you for the comment!
Love your story. Out of the one danger coming up for a breath into the next danger! Wow, lot to think about that could happen next. Glad they all could work together.
I am glad you liked my bit of flash Scrapydo! π Thank you!
You sound like you’ve done this before Barbara! Really well written- very realistic π
Nope…have not done this before! Thank you, and I am glad that you enjoyed the story!
Wow. I love surprise endings. Great Story!
Thank you Phylor! The words just flowed….
Oh I love a climax on top of a climax. Well done Barb, enjoyed your tale.
Thank you Michael! I did not know where I was going and the words just seemed to flow and I caught myself laughing as the ending showed up on the page… π
I’ve had that happen to me, that is, looking behind I get struck from in front.:)
Good story. π
Thanks Susan! For some reason I am unable to comment on your posts! I want you to know that I have been enjoying each and every story that you have written! Be well, and thank you for your participation!
To get through the terror they had to be in going through those white water rapids then to find themselves about to go down a huge waterfall has to be the worst feeling! I sure hope they made it out of the falls safely.
That would be another story – eh? π Thanks for the comment!
Wow ~ How to get out of this in one piece? ~ Well written ~ Babs ~ π
Many thanks to you John! I cannot wait to see what happens with Marg and the Brigadier on this one! π
I have been away visiting family for a few days Babs ~ I will be posting my latest episode a little late this week ~ π
I hope that you had a lovely trip John! I am looking forward to what you come up with! π
Wow!
Did good, huh? π
Sounds like a really bad dream – just when you think all is OK – wham! Good story.
Why thank you PJ! π
Out of the frying pan, into the fire, eh? Nicely done!
Yup! Thank you! π